tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-18842286.post7914971713289500965..comments2024-02-26T09:30:54.111-06:00Comments on Domine, da mihi hanc aquam!: Awaiting his coming in peaceFr. Philip Powell, OPhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14970857401221305221noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-18842286.post-92161822087879109072012-12-24T11:26:06.699-06:002012-12-24T11:26:06.699-06:00So I re-read the beginning last night, thinking &q...So I re-read the beginning last night, thinking "poetry", and somehow that changed the way I read it - I still found the 2nd paragraph a little choppy, but the rest flowed nicely. I guess you had to leave room in the 2nd paragraph for the laughs :-). <br /><br />Have a Merry Christmas Eve! Shellyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05485793986602894527noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-18842286.post-48509851756770160272012-12-23T15:38:32.028-06:002012-12-23T15:38:32.028-06:00Shelly, I always try to write for the ear. That...Shelly, I always try to write for the ear. That's my poetry training coming out. Sometimes, I doesn't make sense read or heard though. <br /><br />The 2nd para. got hearty chuckles from the congregation. NOLA drivers are notoriously bad. Fr. Philip Powell, OPhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14970857401221305221noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-18842286.post-90579362585998899292012-12-23T13:18:22.296-06:002012-12-23T13:18:22.296-06:00There are times (not regularly) when I read your h...There are times (not regularly) when I read your homilies and know that any "problems" I see could be very easily corrected on the spot with either a change or addition of a word or two, or a certain inflection, or pause, etc... The beginning paragraphs of this homily are like that in places - and since it is meant to be spoken not just read this is certainly a minor issue.<br /><br />I did find the 2nd paragraph choppy, but, again, verbal cues could completely change the impression - and I did chuckle at "Over the years...my own flaws never inconvenience anyone else." Only a smart-alecky INTJ would write something like that ;-). <br /><br />It started flowing nicely from about mid-third paragraph onward. Final two paragraphs were really well-done...I appreciated your voicing the "obvious danger", and then developing that further. Final paragraph really built well on the foundation you had laid out, and I found myself repeating your final sentence, esp. the last half.<br /><br />Thanks - practical, informative and hopeful all rolled together.Shellyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05485793986602894527noreply@blogger.com